Nicely done, not sure it flows as smoothly as it could.
This part kind of through me off rhythm. "I've felt the underworld's kiss, burning me from the inside upon my exposed neck, caressing and cradling the worst of me" perhaps you meant to. All in all good job. I liked the imagery.

Wow, this is amazing, so intense, I loved reading it, two thumbs up!

Beautifully penned.An enjoyable read.