Comments : Fooled by the Steady Sea

  • 4 years ago

    by earlgreytea

    Wow, this poem is amazing. Great job. :)

  • 4 years ago

    by Beautiful Soul

    Much congrats on the win. so well deserved

  • 4 years ago

    by Darren

    Congrats on the win Jane. The imagery and tone of this piece is breathtaking.

  • 4 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    There is a darkness within this write and at the same time a deep seeded hurt keeps floating in every line. The imagery is vivid and it draws the reader into your world from start to finish. A well deserved win! Congrats.

  • 4 years ago

    by amandalynn

    This was an amazing poem. 5/5

  • 3 years ago

    by Dancing Rivers

    Oh wow!! What a heart-wrenching poem.the extended metaphor is superb,I love how you used the element of water (an ever changing element) to describe your lover, and as the sea appears calm and placid, so people may appear to be something they're not.and the final line, as cutting as it is, rings so beautifully true "you never promised to spare me that devastation, so how can I hate you" this is something that I think most people can relate to in terms of any form of relationship, nobody ever promises to spare you the trauma and devastation that comes with loss, yet we all (most) find ourselves converting our love to hate, but that's a risk we put ourselves in.stunning,I love it :-)

  • 3 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    I truly adore Jane's gift of metaphoric beauty within her poetry! She has crafted a touching and heart grabbing poem here. I was mesmerized from start to finish. Her word display and style is very unique and that is something that in itself draws me to this piece.

    Her visual display at the beginning stanza is what blew me away, to then express her feelings and then also give me the unique touch of nature was well crafted. To be drawn in by another soul in such depth as she expresses here is a very deep feeling and when adding metaphors within and throughout, electrifies the message and meaning. Very beautiful poem by Jane this week!

  • 3 years ago

    by JaneDoeWrites

    "Your waves receded and carried me with them, paw by broken paw,
    until the sand was salt, and I was swimming into open jaws."

    ARE YOU KIDDING ME. That is one of the most ingenious, madly creative lines I have ever read on this site, ever. And I'm not exaggerating that one bit. Seriously flawless.