Comments : Coordinates

  • 3 years ago

    by JaneDoeWrites

    This idea was so original, I never would have imagined writing anything close to this in a million years. The places you chose (Kentucky, the ocean, Australia) and how you tied the stanzas along to match the area, wow. You put so much time and effort into writing this and really outsourced a lot of information to really give this write so much dimension. I love reading works that have an interactive side to them (like looking up the coordinates in this) because it gives the reader the opportunity to become involved. The proverb you based this off of is beautiful in and of itself. The magic of what most would call "predetermined destiny", that we are all connected to others at some point in our lives- no matter how much that thread gets tangled, how many obstalces we face in the in-betweens, it never breaks. An outstanding write as always, Hannah! 5/5

  • 3 years ago

    by Beautiful Soul

    I agree with Crystal, this is such a unique spin on direction. The women in this poem seems not to be home sick at all but looking for that person. That one person her heart decided to claim as her own. But she doesn't know where in the world he is. So she tries around the world to find whom she is looking for. The actual places (for the directions) are an excellent touch because it lets the readers mind travel along with her, as she looks for love. No one truly understands love like the heart, it could be like an anchor weighing her heart down. But she fights the weight. When you are in love the heart just knows and you always have to let it be your guide to find the person.

    I love how you did a double view point poem because they are drawn to each other, though it seems like they have never met. I love all the wording with this too. Especially invisible force, it was just a calling and he answered the call of love. That ending is emotional (in a good way honestly). The ending line is great because you wrap up the plot in such a beautiful way. They were meant for each other. Very unique write Hannah. Excellent work. 5/5

  • 3 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Wow Hannah - you really do have a way with words... just in case no one has told you that.. lol.

    I am actually going to be honest and say I did not think you were the author behind this one, now that I read it in your page, I do not know why I did not connect it. I was so focused on the layout in which there was a co-ordinate placed before each stanza, that it kind of blew me away! I thought it was a great idea, and a really nice way to add something different to the usual style of stanza by stanza.

    Well done on making another amazing piece from a challenge, you did really well with the prompts, I know you have been busy lately, but it never shows within your challenge pieces! I really like the thought behind the poem, and the title too is catching.

    Well done!!

  • 2 years ago

    by BlueJay

    Judging Comment:

    The title caught my attention because a piece with a title so unique really could be about anything. It's the kind of piece that seems like it'll be all over the place because of the format but ends up being so beautiful it makes you cry. I think this piece was so completely unique that it captures the attention of readers of any genre. The imagery was phenomenal, unlike anything else and yet it was still written so that the audience can actually see this, they can visualize it and understand exactly what you mean. I love that the style you chose was so simple but the piece itself was eloquently elaborate. extraordinarily penned.

  • 2 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    A thoroughly excellent and beautifully written piece.

  • 2 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    A thoroughly excellent and beautifully written piece.