I really don't know how should I illustrate the splendor of this breathtaking write. What a fantastic flow of lines and segments you have created. This write is very just.
The wording here in this write is just touching any other galaxy. I like the way you have mixed the sentimental thoughts with nature. The ending is I can say is quite amazing and sad with the sun sets.
This is my beloved segment:
And desperate sighs,
Those tempting blue eyes.
You are expressed the stream of love very clearly while it also holds the sadness within it in the end.