Comments : Seasoned Hearts (Eintou)

  • 2 years ago

    by GB

    I have been thinking about this format lately, I couldn't think of suitable concept, it pleased me see you penned it very professionally as it should be written.

    Always a pleasure to read your poetry.

  • 2 years ago

    by Everlasting

    There's nothing like listening to Piano songs and reading poetry.
    It's refreshing. Okay, I'm not familiar with this form poetry, but by reading the instructions, it sounds like its fun to attempt it.

    On a critique side and before I forget:

    On the 6th line, shouldn't that one have four syllables? Mu-tu-al is 3 syllables according to the dictionary. So I counted 5 syllables on that line.

    What I gathered from this piece is that, two people got married. It seems like at first the couple was not happy with the marriage, there was no love, but as time passed Love was built.

    Thank you for sharing.

  • 2 years ago

    by alka mendiratta

    That's too deep Meena.
    Looking into our Indian custom ,most marriages happen this way ,and eventually as years pass the companionship results in love for each other :

    "a long road travelled as
    mutual hearts gaze
    with love"
    Loved to read a new form of poetry with the details of it's concept and origin.
    Thanks for sharing.

  • 2 years ago

    by Rania Moallem

    This is a poem read at its depths not at the level of words,
    I am taken with the content of this poem wandering with thoughts of life in general and the choices that could lead to such..

    Brilliant form and brilliantly penned, loved your ideas!
    Thanks for sharing. <3

  • 2 years ago

    by uttAm

    Nice poem Meena ji..
    Within few limited words you have potrayed such a deep image.

  • 2 years ago

    by Robert Gardiner

    Splendid Meena!!!