I can tell by reading this rather personal poem that this person is very special and dear to you. There is nothing wrong by letting someone know how you feel. You have written this with such honesty and thank you for sharing. 5/5 Added to my favorite
I know that feeling! The effort to consciously Think about the Other is so hard when the feelings are strong. It's like you're locked into a Vulcan mind meld of the eyes & later the eyes dominate all impressions.
You put it simply and straight forward, as usual, leaving out the ornate imagery in which too many poets get bogged down. I appreciate that directness.
I love this and know exactly what you meant by it!
I loved the rhythm to this poem most of all, I really felt like it already had a tune to it, like it was lyrics to a song, like the bridge or chorus part.
Really great flow and I like the ending line being on it's own, I think this emphasises a lot of frustration on the point that you cannot write about this person no matter how much motivation you have to do so.