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  • 2 years ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Hello Koan,

    this is simply breathtaking...

    I love the format, the intense imagery, for example: inviting my immobile waxen flesh
    for a last shivering dance.
    ^
    Here we have the smooth 'nubile' body, cold and elegant, moving like a ballerina, long slender limbs outstretched moving like music through the scene.

    Wonderful!

    Take care,

    Michael

    • 2 years ago

      by Koan

      Your comment just made my day! Thx Michael!

  • 2 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    I love the presentation and most everything about this poem

    • 2 years ago

      by Koan

      Thx bro!

  • 2 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    This really is an exquisite piece of poetry - well done and all the very best,
    Ben

    • 2 years ago

      by Koan

      Thank you Ben!!!

  • 2 years ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Hello Koan,

    congratulations, this struck me as a winner after my first reading.

    Well done.

    Michael

    • 2 years ago

      by Koan

      Thank you Michael for the support!

  • 2 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Yes, well done on the win, Koan - thoroughly deserved.

    • 2 years ago

      by Koan

      Thank you Ben for the support!

  • 2 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    Always have admired your unique style of writing... It's graceful, elegant and truly breathtaking... Well deserved... Made me smile to see this on the front page.

    Heartbreaking piece this is.... So damn beautiful!

    • 2 years ago

      by Koan

      It made me smile too... Thank you for your words dear MP!!!

  • 2 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    Judging Comment:

    The melancholy tone in this write just pulls the
    reader along with the writer making her feel what
    the writer feels. The choice of words used brings
    out the emotions and images alive and it captures
    the reader's heart. Its so beautifully intense but
    passionately sad and the layout of the poem
    gives a lasting impact like it reaches out to the
    reader. It also gave me the image of the ocean/sea
    who can't touch his love but can only look and
    yearn from afar. I adore this...beautifully sad.

    • 2 years ago

      by Koan

      Thank you Meena.. ~hugs~

  • 1 month ago

    by mossgirl19

    Wow... this is absolutely a heart-gripping write. Beautifully written.