This is truly a depressing exhale...Im very moved! I have never tried this form or heard of it
Although your brilliant approach make this an easy form, it isnt! ~smiles~ You have fallowed the rules precisely and yet made it so poetic! Only real talents can do that... Now that I read this a few times I find myself wondering if the word "lame" should be changed to "tame" What do you think?
My sub-judge comment:
Fabulous use of the form and the word choice as well. There's not a single forced rhyme, no departure from substance to inject mechanical coupling. (Although the dash in line two should NOT be there). The poem evokes a Grizabella - like image, the fallen, aged glamour queen immersed in misery, plagued by memories which, in retrospect, now are seen to lead inevitably to her current doom.