Comments : When with You I Lay (Diatelle)

  • 1 year ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Meena
    This really is a very clever write indeed, and thank you for the information regarding the form - I had never even heard of a diatelle.
    I hope this is nominated - it deserves to be, but I am out of votes!
    All the very best
    Ben

  • 1 year ago

    by Koan

    A beauty..

  • 1 year ago

    by Cindy

    Meena
    You have turned this form into a excellent poem. So much sadness in your words
    Take care
    Love Cindy

  • 1 year ago

    by Cindy

    Congrats Meena.

  • 1 year ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Congratulations, Meena - I knew this was a winner.
    All the best

  • 1 year ago

    by J Nair

    Congratulations Meena, what a technique. There is so much to learn from you.

    And yes the poem did touch a nerve.
    The flapping of broken wings, the struggle of a trapped prey.

    Thanks for sahring it.

    Jay.

  • 1 year ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    This is so beautifully created, both in wording and in looks, it also shows your talent for poetry and I assume some time went into perfecting this.

    Beautiful message, both inside and out of the form!

  • 1 year ago

    by Dixiedaisy

    When with you I lay (diatelle)
    By Meena Krish (10)

    Delightful read. Forms tend to be a little difficult, especially adhering to the rules is increasingly painful to match. As for subject matter, all I can say is, WOW! I normally don't care for sad poetry but, this poem just had the punch in the gut of memories. Reminds me of Adele's song "hello" for some reason. Wonderful write!

  • 1 year ago

    by William Mae

    Your poetry is beyond beautiful