Comments : The Naughty List effect (Senyru)

  • 1 year ago

    by Everlasting

    Ah! and the reader doesn't know if the child received the bike or not.

    One. The child could be crying because he did not received the brand new bike.

    Two. The child could be crying because he is happy that he received the brand new bike.

    Though the title says naughty list affect, so I'm thinking the kids wish was too much, and thus, he cried because he didn't received anything.

  • 1 year ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    I hope those were tears of joy. We as parents trying real hard to make all their wishes come true. Enjoyed reading

  • 1 year ago

    by Larry Chamberlin

    I'm sure Tommy got just what he deserved. (:{

    Dadgum entitled kids think they can run amok & still avoid the coal-stocking!

    [Nicely done, Michael]

    • 1 year ago

      by - Mr. Darcy

      Thanks Larry, your praise means a lot.

  • 1 year ago

    by Ingrid de Klerck

    Hi Michael,

    In these days of severe crisis, lots of children will be crying there eyeballs out after Santa has paid a visit, most especially when they assume they must have been 'bad' to not see their wish granted.
    For parents Christmas is a difficult time, when means are few and wishes of their off spring are big. ( and lots of peer pressure on them as well!)

    Well done, much more to this poem than meets the eye.

    (((hugs))) xx

    • 1 year ago

      by - Mr. Darcy

      You are so right Christmas time is too expensive and its increasingly difficult to meet expectations. Dont ypu miss the simple gifts; the homemade toys, the satsuma and nuts.
      ((Hugs)) xx

  • 1 year ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Michael - a perfect senryu here about the consequences of a naughty year!
    All the very best,
    Ben

  • 1 year ago

    by yogi73

    Ha! Simply charming. a few short words summons a great deal of memory and wishful thinking of shiny new chrome and boyhood freedom...at least that is what a bike was for me as a child.

  • 1 year ago

    by Darren

    I never got a bike either,

    mmmmm, now I know why.

    thanks for opening my eyes,

    • 1 year ago

      by - Mr. Darcy

      Thanks guys. My Christmas bike was a 2nd hand racer. I felt like the cat who got the cream.

  • 1 year ago

    by Cindy

    Ahhh....poor Tommy....this is a sad little piece.
    Great job!
    Take care
    Cindy
    *hugs