Comments : Him

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Hi, and welcome to the site.

    This piece has a very intimate feel to it - honest and moving. Nothing affects us quite like powerful love, does it?

    "That night I held on to your dog tags until I fell asleep. That was the safest I ever felt. Ever."

    ^^^^

    I love those two lines.

    Well done on this and keep writing,
    All the best, Ben

  • 8 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Hello,

    As Ben says, an intimate piece. It is funny how when we write the words seems to flow so easily. But, when try to speak them, especially to who they are intended for it become too difficult.

    Maybe share this with 'Him'?

    Take care,

    Michael

  • 8 years ago

    by PETER EDWARDS

    A great piece of writing Littleone, whoever you are.
    I love Love poems, and this is a good one.
    May the Love last forever. Look after it, as Love is a fragile thing.
    Very well written.

  • 7 years ago

    by Kyreeya

    Awww it's so sweet and secure. Who ever you are I really liked this poem :)