Comments : Ol Donyo Keri 'striped mountain' (concrete)

  • 7 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Excellent and that's all you get from me. One, because I'm on a tablet and two because you think it's funny!

    Quite seriously, this is very good

    All the best Michael

    • 7 years ago

      by Mr. Darcy

      *rolls over on his back, kicking his legs up in the air, whilst belly laughing like a child*

  • 7 years ago

    by Em

    Haha Michael your footnote made me chuckle because I can picture the mountain without the rocky road but what if the mountains crumbling anyway? Lol

    To the poem: It was a very picturesque piece. I like the format and structure. You really cease to amaze me because each piece of your work is original.

    Take care, Em

  • 7 years ago

    by Rsan

    Nothing much I guess I should say. The poem is just original, unique and quite immensely satisfying.Every little part is just perfect.
    Most of all I could almost picture it for I have been to mt.Kilimanjaro and would be quite familiar with it.

    A quite beautiful masterpiece'

    • 7 years ago

      by Mr. Darcy

      Unfortunately I have not been to it, but my research has placed it firmly on my bucket list.

      On my personal PC I have this text overlaid on a picture of Mt. Kilimanjaro

  • 7 years ago

    by Brenda

    Michael, so very cool! Loved the format, loved the words. You totally "rocked" it! Take care-Brenda

  • 7 years ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    Michael I am speechless. This one rocks. Take care

  • 7 years ago

    by The Po whet

    A difficult piece to write I'd assume but I give you a 5/5 for telling that beautiful story about my Kenyan communities as though you were a local here!. Your description of how these people revere this mountain is vivid and on point. It's rooted in their tradition and in a way help conserve the nature surrounding this magnificent mountain.