This is beautiful. I do not yet know much about tanka (I will look at your link in a minute) but I know that they are regarded as 'feminine' forms and are ancient Japanese poems that were often written for ladies of the court or some such. Also that uppercase letters and punctuation should be kept to a minimum (if at all) and the subject is now non-specific.
This is a lovely, warm and romantic tanka that would have graced the courts of any country in any time.
I believe this write has been written with great passion of love. There's a great connection of love with the nature. The link of love and nature is always very dramatic to read and I adore this a lot.
This fantastic little poem is a symbol of upcoming true love, song coming from the depth of the heart.
The imagery in this work is phenomenal and the simplicity of it actually works really well in comparison to the lack of capitalizations. The punctuation is elaborately done when considering the rest of the piece which is interesting and gives this piece a hint of much needed dimension without over doing it or losing sight of the author's intentions. Absolutely wonderful use of the format - tankas always seem so difficult to me so when I see one that makes them seem as effortless as this I can't help but be amazed. All in all, this piece is stunning!
What a lovely and well written tanka..
I like the way it flows and how graceful it is... just pretty!
9 months ago
Michael me old fruit this is amazing.... I love Tanka formed poetry because the restrictions are just right, especially for love poetry, not as short as a haiku but not as long and waffle like as other forms and when the word choice is as perfect as this it results in a piece of writing that is inspiring.
I love how convey the emotions in here with delicate imagery and it flows on point.
A great write my friend, should be proud of this one.