Oh, no, Em. Lucero, challenged me to write one of these forms. I agreed far too quickly, before I researched the form and how strict it actually is. This is my first, so it is far from a poem worth nominating, but thank you, my dear for the thought. xx
1 year ago
by Ben Pickard
I have your back here, dear woman - I have all three nominations remaining. A first for me midweek!
Michael - what a wonderful and clever piece of formed poetry. You know it must be good when you get halfway through the explanation of the rules and regulations of said form and find yourself feeling hopelessly confused and inadequate!
Dad looked miffed, for he knew this feeling, Christmas,
But, being torn from his bed caused his temper to run.
"I don't really care, this just isn't fun, there's snow
And there's..., I don't care, he peeved, back to your bed!
Mum took the children's hands, her face all bright.
They looked up at her... past her, up at a curious sight.
Little fingers pointed up into a sky full of snow <<-- this one should have had "sight"
And high up in a tree, there indeed was a sight.
They all looked up, in the tree that was now a bed;
Bed for a person... a Santa, he'd fallen this Christmas,
down from his sleigh. "Quick children we need to run!"
Santa groaned, as he awoke, not feeling too bright.
the fifth stanza should have the ending words like
Michael, what a delightful write! Entertaining throughout. Totally neat style. I have never heard of this before, very cool. That's one of the things (one of many) that I like about you, introducing different styles. Always something new-well done-
Thanks for your vote of confidence. Lol. The form is a very old one, but my first attempt. I messes up, but thankfully Lucero helped. It's more a story than a poem, ideally it would have been a clever poem with all the fixings, but the form is tricky to say the least. Still, the next one might be a little easier. Practice makes perfect, or so they say! Lol
Thanks for reading, it means a lot. X
1 year ago
Your poetry never ceases to amaze me, I have to say I love this, all the usual blah blahs word choice and structure etc but I love the depth you've written in and the imagery ot throws up.
I've never hear of this form before...and usually when I find one I jump right on the bandwagon and start a scribbling.....this looks tricky as hell..... Might leave this one for a time when.my brain will allow me to play lol
I've never tried writing a Sestina before for it looked complicated to me; but after reading this it makes me want to try. This poem has a nice flow and rhythm to it with all the spirit of Christmas mixed into each line. Nicely written and congrats on the HM.