An excellent, visual write.
Well done on this,

Ben

I liked this a lot. Your visuals are spot on. It told a lot more than one story here,-well done-

I agree about the visuals, such engaging imagery!

My only suggestion or thought would be to possibly add or experiment with different punctuation instead of the commas. Like a dash, semicolon, etc.

Again, totally my opinion. Keep writing, will read more soon.