Nice poem. But it's kind of sad. I hate people who judge others.

"Into a pit of dispare"
Despair is spelt that way <---

I really enjoyed this piece. The rhyme was definitely present, but it wasn't overbearing. I liked the way the poem flowed for the most part, the rhythm was fairly easy to follow. For some reason I could easily imagine the situation you were describing, and that might just be testimony to the fact that judgement and hatred are just too common these days.

AWESOME POEM!! I loved it.....such a good message...there's never a need to make fun of someone and maybe someone who does that on a regular basis will read this and think about it. Great job!!

really good poem, and so sad. keep up good work,

this is really good..keep up the good work...~sherrie~

hey, very good poem, and has a great meaning well keep it up!

great poem!! keep it up!! :)

oo and i like how the title went two ways..

"What can't you give me a break"
is that meant to say Why can't you give me a break?

Very nicely written, it really is sad how strong of an impact others can have when they pick on someone. Good work