nice poem, kim! keep it up!

This was sensational. I like the way you have structured the stanzas in such a way that it looks as if the words are floating, falling on the page, like the feather. I took the feather to be metaphorical of a person and found I could relate to this lonely feathers ordeal. You write on very different topics and I am yet to read one of your poems and think..."you've done this before".... in a word.. SUPER!

[lostlaureate - come find me]

Awesome! Keep it up, i loved it.
xxxxx

Oo very nice. i love the imagery and teh repetition. and each stanza ends perfectly

Wow.... I really like this one. You are very talented 5/5

Great imagry and description in this peice, good flow too. if the feather meant to be simbolic of a person or life btw? well i took it to be anyway and found it vey easy to think of in such a way. the content is clear and well expressed and the peices structure very well thought out.

5/5

Is the feather meant to represent a person? Its lovely imagery, and a novel idea...your poems are more original than most
:)
I love the ending too
WD

Biscut --
Again, another good poem. I think the theme was kind of vague, and I couldn`t really grasp your intent. But the descriptions, deatail, and imagery put into it was great! The flow kind of knoked me off a bit, as it`s not steady, but it still worked out well. Good job.

Love Much,
Samantha Hollywood

At age 15 and you wrote this! you are born a writter ;)

keep it up
i loved it alot