Comments : Poisoned Soul

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Ren,
    A sad poem here about the terrors of having your heart broken by someone you love and when that happens, you really do feel like you will never love again, if only to protect yourself.
    My only suggestion would be "And I will never love again" at the end there - personally I feel it would flow better, but it's completely up to you, obviously. Either way, a great piece,
    Ben

    • 8 years ago

      by Ren

      Hey Ben,
      Thank you so much for your comment and your suggestion! I see what you mean about the flow. I think younger me was trying to rhyme but who knows haha. I really appreciate you reading my poems and commenting!
      Thanks again!
      Take care,
      Ren

  • 8 years ago

    by PETER EDWARDS

    What a sad poem Ren. Yes. Love can crush one when it's not returned in equal measure and then of course will die. The good news is that you will love again, and this 'love' in your past life, will become just another memory.
    A well written piece which I enjoyed reading.

    • 8 years ago

      by Ren

      Hi, Peter!
      Thank you so much for reading my poem and commenting! I very much appreciate it! :)
      You're absolutely right about loving again...that's a nice thing to remember :)
      Thanks again!
      Take care!