Comments : If I Held On A Bit Longer

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Well written, Ren, with some great imagery throughout.
    I hope you are well,
    Ben

    • 8 years ago

      by Ren

      Thank you so much, Ben! :)

  • 7 years ago

    by yogi73

    i like how you built up the anticipation and anxiety of falling, falling into the unknown world, and cutting deeper into the night. Great imagery and creating a feel of slight desperation, until you nicely finish with back to swaying in the wind..

    • 7 years ago

      by Ren

      Thank you so much! I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment :)
      Take care!