This was kinda sad...thats got to be tough.....4/5 though the flow was off in the first stanza

Okay good idea. i really like the idea. the poem is simple which is not my style most of the time but then again i am not great at portraying feelings and you did a fantastic job. the rhyme scheme was very weird im not sure if you were using one at all if you werent its okay but with poems that dont rhyme i think they should be more metaphorical instead of simple but 4/5 good job