Well the ending isnt the greatest...it dosnt exactly rap up the whole poem...but other then that very imaginative and sad...4/5

Another great poem 5/5 great job
Becky
xoxo

I loved the last verse more than the others i think, because it is so well written and very metaphorical.
the last verse doesn't have to wrap it all up in my opinion. it simply has to deliver a final emotional blow so as to give the reader the most comprehensive understanding about how you feel. i thought you did that magnificently.
when it says "washed away with my tears and peirced with your lies", i thought that was extroardibarily well written and really beautiful. oh yeah, i changed my name because i wanted something more original and i don't really like my name.
-Suzie

Lol, i realise i have already commented, by i'm gonna write anotehr one so i can tell u why i change my name. sorry abouyt changing it so often, i'm gonan stick wiht "lady Vengeance" i'm sure. u could add me to ur favourites so taht would make it easier? (wink wink) lol. cya
-Suzie

Awesome!
I know that remark sounded VERY cliche, but I mean it this time. Sorry for the limited vocabulary, but the words truly spoke to me, as though there was a girl there, mending and crying over her heart and soul...Very good work indeed, and excellent emotion.

Good Writing!
beth

The beginning about how your heart was mending after all this time and he tore it apart so quickly was great i can relate to that so much good writing coment back on one of my poems like you reading comments and knowing I have a reason to write poetry makes me smile which if you know me you know that is hard to do thankyou

Amazing, just so nice and heartfelt. Made me cry, and havent cried over a poem for a while.
fab job
check out mine
Tara-Kay xxx

OMG Ruby!! this poem is GREAT! awesome work **5/5**

WOW Ruby... you are so talented... i loved this poem a heap and it touched my heart deeply... very creative and thoughtful... love ya and take care... Tess xxx

I'm amazed with this poem.

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__________________________________________your word choice was amazing__________________________________I felt alot of emotions while reading it_______________loved the use of the needle______ i could relate to mending a heart and what he tore appart in so little time what took you years to construct________________5/5 for sure_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________take care____________________AdioS!________________________________ ___

_ _ _ ____ _ _ _ _ pili :)

Wow this poem was absolutely amazing i loved all the wording and how u reflected everything that is happening to you as a sower person that is very original to me 5/5

Imagery was amazing you brought the poem to life, 5/5 loved it!

Nice work here, I really like how you continued the same imagery right through the piece. Your rhyming is really nice in this one also, it all fits in and doesn't sound forced.

Hey its me havent heard from me in a while very sorry for that
Great poem I loved how it flowed and kept me interested all the time
Thanks Ruby
Em

I love it how you used the needle to describe what happened.
It really makes it so the reader has a picture in their mind about what's going on in the poem.
5/5

Very good poem...5/5! I loved it.. hugs

Hey great poem...very touching..keep it up!:)
thanks for your entry into contest girl!

Awesome & breath taking !
5/5
love
amy

Brilliant poem, really well written. i love the use of the needle though out to describe it

This poem is so sad. I can really relate to this poem, it's always a horrible feeling.