Comments : Childish Paintings

  • 11 years ago

    by Natalie

    I like how you see deeper into things! I like the poem very much it makes me picture and image of a child painting...... 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by N J Thornton

    I liked the playful tone of this and the way you described the “childish painting.” The way you used questions, this of course is the way of a child, questions, questions, questions. Although this is good, I cant help feeling the poem is told rather than shown naturally. Do you understand what I mean? I just couldn’t “see” enough of the poem, that’s all. Good job though. Keep it up.

  • 11 years ago

    by sarah

    ... the poem was great. i truly liked your write. it was so creative. ive read many poems where you can picture what is happening but you just set it out for the reader and it makes it so much clearer. this tecnique was different and i liked it. shows some about your personality.

  • 11 years ago

    by Fig

    Ooh! i like the dark twist on such a light subject matter. the repitition is good too. sorry im not very useful at this sort of thing, i only really critique if i dislike a poem, but i like all yours soo far, so its a bit hard. i will be cruel and merciless on some of the others. promise.
    xxx