Hm, thats really good. Kinda disturbing to think of that stuff though. But cool too.

-Jennifer.

Overall Rating: 3/5

UR NAN!

This poem has a very good plotline, but at times it was hard for me to find the rhythm, probably because I'm just stupid. Haha.

~*You are my only one*~

Thats a tearjerker if i ever saw one.
;(
5/5
very good story i love the title its very creative and original i LOVE original.
lol
~EMah

I liked this poem, it was well wrotten and highlights a problem we have in society today with people turning a blind eye. Well written mate 5/5

Wow! A very vivid and dark picture you have written. Yet one that needs to be brought to lite. You have done an excellent job with this.

It was well written even though it was so shocking it was put into good words

- Jamie

Dang that's messed up. I hope this isn't a true story. Man it was a good poem though
-vino

This was deep. Thanks for writing and for the chance for me (and others) to read it. Things happen like this every day, and sometimes it might be the closest to love some may ever have.

Unfortunately, this is the world that surrounds us and all we have to do is hold on.

Mouse.

The message communicated was very clear. I like how it was presented. Stories such as this should be told in this simple, easy to understand way; some would write in a too heavy way, full of dark words which to me makes it vague and interrupts the message. Thanks for sharing, this was very great.