Comments : My story

  • 12 years ago

    by Tess

    The way you displayed your emotions is very powerful. I know how it is to look back and remember each and every story- i do it everyday! Anyway, I hope you are okay and keep strong. Love Tess xx

  • 12 years ago

    by Tess

    5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Razorblade

    Great poem! I really liked this one a lot. I know how you feel, just keep it together and one day you'll be better. (Did not mean for that to rhyme.)

    -Taylor

  • 12 years ago

    by BleedingAngel

    Oh my God, that took my breath away, grabbed me from the beginning to the end..Ohh wow...This poem is the most beautiful yet sad poem I have read in a very loooong time, so emotional and deep...And while reading it I pictured me you, telling me and showing me your story, you are amazing with words hunni...Just hope this isn't true, hope that you are still here...I am always here for you sweety...Love ya

    Much Love Sabrina

  • 12 years ago

    by Dumpstead

    Bombastic poetry.

    But still I wish you had paid a bit more attention to the below stanza and made it more rhyming. It somewhat obstructs the flow of the poem a bit. especially since all your other stanza's rhyme.

    "You could have not hurt me
    You didn't need to
    What have I done to deserve it?
    Is it because I love you?"

    But overall, a fantastic poem.

  • 12 years ago

    by Drake Takeyama

    Forgive me, I've been such a fool. I didn't realize what I had until I lost it. I'd give anything for you, you mean the world to me! More than the world, but I couldn't show it. I can't believe I let this happen, I'm sorry. From now till armageddon I will be here for you. I promise.

  • 12 years ago

    by Trampled Angel

    Oh beautiful, guys suck, that's all there is to it. Friends that are girls are better than a boyfriend anyday, but I know that doesn't take away the pain. My ex, just broken me and I tried to end my life because of it, but it is my friends who are with me and who are seeing me through, not this loser of a guy. I feel for you and I wish I could help piece together you broken heart. I give you a hug, and hold you as you cry, I cry too, because I know there is no pain greater than that of a broken heart. Good luck baby, god bless you and if you need me, message me anytime, though it will have to be on one of my poems because my email link is not up. Huggles hunny!

    -Mikochan

  • 12 years ago

    by angela121

    Thats awsome! i feel really sad but its good ! i give it a five! some of the things sorta realate to me, some how not really they just reminded me of my memories..even tho im young i have had one bf and they hurt me w/ one of my best friends

  • 12 years ago

    by Tr!c!a_s@tanicangel

    I love your poem hun,i hope everything is ok,i totally understand how u fell inside.why doesnt anything go rite and why am i always getting hurt i`ll never know.i just want it all to end,i use to cut my wrist as well it really does help but my friends throw a fit so im tryin to stop.hope you can too.
    Tr!c!@

  • 12 years ago

    by Torn

    Yeh huni im sorry you feel this way and have been caused so many betrayals. I've had my fair share of betrayal too..and inner strength and friendship got me through.
    So hun dont hesitate to lean on someone ok!?
    i hope you're doing ok and not seriously thinking of taking you're life, because you're so much better than that ok hun?!!
    Much love xoxoxo

  • 12 years ago

    by sammy jo

    OMG! i love this poem, babe, please there is NO guy in the world wrth deing for u need to know that, and i know how u feel,

  • 12 years ago

    by ashlie

    WOW

  • 12 years ago

    by ashlie

    WOW

  • 12 years ago

    by Always Smiling

    Hmmm i really dont know wat to say.... it was beyond words how good that was. i really really hope ur ok
    luv always smiling oxoxo

  • 12 years ago

    by **Stacy**

    This is really great. i loved this soo much, totally can relate to it. i really hope u're ok.

  • 12 years ago

    by avery

    Wow.
    Just, wow.
    I really love this poem.
    I can relate a lot, even though
    you don't give too much detail.
    Which IS good.

  • 12 years ago

    by Gizmo

    This is amazing..plz rate my poems... this explains my past with guys too!

    i will always love you hugh no matter what! :"(

  • 12 years ago

    by Jaky

    I loved it!!! This was amazing it is one of my favorites poems yet!!!! Great job!!!!! And it is so true cuz most guys are nothing but pure b******!!!!!

  • 12 years ago

    by myxlittlexcut

    I know how it feels to have that guys you love turn out to be the reasons why you cry/ wish to die
    they can rip out your heart without a care and just leave you
    this peom did a wonderful job of describing the pain that comes with lost relationships well done

  • 12 years ago

    by Wings Of Flames

    I loved it flow never seesed (sorry cant spell too good)
    And it was so deep and so many people can relate to it . . . I know I can
    Thank you
    Em