Wow.Another one I didn't see coming, and another one that impressed me. You have a knack for words, putting everyday things into a beautiful poem,something boring to something worth paying attention to, worth thinking about. My favourite line is:

But it's the shattered rhythm
of a shattered song

It's rhythm stood out for me and I read it so smoothly. I have no complaints, being as if it were mine I would not change a thing. Well...With the exception of a tiny error... I'm sure that you meant to say 'it' instead of 'in' here:

and vibrates there. Soon it's my
entirety. I suck 'in' in with
every breath.

This is a beautiful write, I really love the type of language you use. Keep writing, I look forward to reading.