Nice. 5/5

Its long but very good, i enjoyed reading it and it didnt bore me
keep it up
love and best wishes Tara-Kay

Very unique....like a story. Great job

RUBY!!! hey! i havn't read one of your poems in sooooooooo long. this is brilliant!! i like how you use words like "t'was". it's so ..... i dunno.... it just makes it more classical and tame i guess. lol.
always, Suzie

P.S. OMG! i'm mentioned in your profile!! : ) Thanku!!!

You deserve a much higher rating Rubz
The words you used just brought it all together, and not once did the rhythm break.
I cant get enough.
With adoration
~Em

WOW, im in awe.. this was just amazing.. it flowed so perfectly, and the way you told the story.. it was just, you couldnt stop reading.. great work!!!