Wow! This is -excellent-! I loved this poem =)
You have talent. Keep using it ^-^
5/5

This is incredible! Amazing!

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Nicely done Kaitlin!!!

Another really good poem. I like your style a lot. 5/5

Excellent poem, i love how the story is portrayed in first person.. You feel like you are standing right between the two lovers..

Hey,
i reckon this was a great poem but could perhaps benifit from some better word usage and more complex rhymes. Just a thought :)

It was a brilliant poem though, and your use of tense was consistant.

I would appreciate a comment back?

Stacey

Awesome poem, you're truely a great writer

What a wonderful poem! that's top notch in my book. pretty close in style.