Comments : Nature's Dance (Haiku)

  • 18 years ago

    by Melissa

    Holly, this is amazing! You are awesome with this form of poetry. I don't know how you do it, but don't stop! Love it! ;o)

  • 18 years ago

    by Jacklyn

    Great poem i love it! so much truth and everything. sorry i fell behind a bit

    ~Jacklyn

  • 18 years ago

    by Gary Jurechka

    A nice haiku, Holly.I like how instead of the usual picturesque beauty of nature you chose to show it's destructive said.A different take-unique.Good job!-Gary

  • 18 years ago

    by Lu

    From these few short lines you have painted a picture I can clearly see....

    I must admit I find a Haiku hard to write in the meaning of : I find it hard to show in a few lines exactly what it is I'm trying to say .......but you pull them off so easily.

    Wonderfully written piece Holly, with such vivid and clear expression .

  • 18 years ago

    by shobhana kumar

    Great haiku! i really enjoy reading your work.

    love and luck
    shobhana

  • 18 years ago

    by Timeless Hopeful

    That is true, mother nature is a cruel b**** when we mess with her. That is a good haiku Holly.

  • 18 years ago

    by Shædow Poet

    The real point of haiku's is to leave a mark... to write three small lines that are more powerful than a sonnet, or something longer.

    And you've achieved this! Mother nature twirls gives me an image of a hurricaine... I can imagine red-tinted dirt tracks, host to ruined houses.

    The "fear" reminds me of our helplessness against mother nature- did you know (you probably do) that there is a volcano in America (I think) that is over 400 years due? If/when is explodes, it will destroy half our Earth! Every moment we live is a moment closer to the Earth's destruction... yes, it's morbid, but it's also reality.

    I really liked this, unfortunately I was never blessed with Haiku writing talent, but you certainly are!