I can tell you wrote this from the heart. It's just that obvious. The flow and the rythme...very nice. You are very talented.

Nice job, you had amazing vocabulary in this one, and it was just an all around nice poem keep it up 5/5

~!*FallenTears~!*
~!*Meaghen~!*

Aww hunny. Your such a great poet. Keep it up..

Too many things I can not understand,
Yet the world you reside within makes sense.
What you consider to be a band of brothers,
Makes me break down when you have gone.
—But forever you remain a military man.

Again that was very sad yet very very good...You have a real talent expressing your thoughts..sometimes its hard for me to get my point out..Great job!!

~Always4You~

This is a really great piece you have got your own style of writing great work keep up the good work

gema oxoxoxo

Wow, this is such a powerful poem. This is such a differently style. I'm not quite sure what the purpose of the "-" if before the last line in each stanza though. This proves, you don't need rhymes in poems. Sad and powerful, great combination.

Very powerfully written. good structure and a smooth flow in this peice, and the content is fantastricly written. powerful and expressive with some very clear anfd well used descriptions

5/5

Another beautifully written poem!! i always like your poems..it flowed well and it was deep and emotional...good job...5/5

Ok, i have to say this one is a million times better then the one i just read... and considering that one was awesome... this one was... just like "whoa". My favorite line is this was "Entwined sadness roping your heart.I can not stop what continues to bleed."... You definately dont have to rhyme to catch your readers attention, its really fantastic and you have a really unique talent for writing. I seriously cant critize like you did on mine... because i dont see any flaw in your writing. You capture peoples hearts and souls in your writing and you express so much emotion its crazy. Well, peace out,

Whoa....
That seriously left me speechless.
Ah, where do i begin? The wording was amazing. Imagery was a very strong attribute in this poem, i liked the way you made your ideas almost tangible, whilst maintaining a creative style and mysterious atmosphere.

"I, Myself remain an eager voice unheard.
But shaking hands dare not hold my own.
—Defenses built so heart can not tumble."
Was a particularly powerful segment.

Exquisite work, the only critisism i can offer is that sometimes i got lost in the visualization and read it, but didn't really understand it, and had to re-read a few lines. But that is just a pebble in the road, not a very big deal as your point was sucessfully driven home.

5/5
you're going on my favorites

Yet again..Another Lovely poem.. Again it was sad though, but I still loved it..
It was easy to read, and heart felt which is exalent. Keep up to good work.. I enjoy reading them. ^^

Yet again..Another Lovely poem.. Again it was sad though, but I still loved it..
It was easy to read, and heart felt which is exalent. Keep up to good work.. I enjoy reading them. ^^

I had tears in my eyes when i had finished that poem. i liked the final stanza the most, as to me it was the most emotional. i was confued by the way some lines seemed to rhyme, and others did not.

once again, the pictures your words created were amazing

Ruby

Wow, I really liked this one, it was so emotionally written. Awesome Job. I'm sure there are people that can relate to this. Keep up the amazing work.

Peace, Joe

Too many secrets locked in an enchanted box,
Of which I should never myself hold the key.

I love those lines. The whole poem has an appeal that I can't really describe. The bottom line is, I love it!

Good work x

Kaylee, what should I say! you are truly amazing! this poem is truly outstanding. Your description of what is obvious and what goes on - the apparent and reality is so profound.

excellent writing, truly.

good luck and peace
shobhana

This is really an astounding poem. You used powerful and descriptive words, I felt every line in my heart. Keep up your great work, you really deserve poet's honor. 5/5 xxx

Wow. you are amazing at writing poems. the best poem i have ever read. you can tell you were made for this. Whenever you get inspired; be sure to write some poems, i'll love reading them =]

-thanks for the suggestions, i'll try to work on that. haha.

I love this poem, it's so amazing, and beautifully written. Your description of a military man is excellent. 5/5
Keep writing.

I love the poem