Comments : To See Your Beautiful Smile

  • 17 years ago

    by Sarah Ann

    Aww! Very expressive and very sweet. Beautiful and simple in every way. Wonderful write. 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    Thank you alllllllllllllllllllll.................

  • 17 years ago

    by shobhana kumar

    Beautifully written Goran.

    just a suggestion - did you mean the last line in the poem to read "No matter what the world will say?"

    great to know we have a published poet amidst us. Will come back to check out more of yours.

    good luck and peace
    shobhana

  • 17 years ago

    by Robie Lincer

    What can i say? you are a good writter, i am speachless.

    5/5 keep up the good work

  • 17 years ago

    by Jessica

    Awwww.. this was really sweet.. the descriptions were beautiful, it flowed well, and the rhymes worked..

    That I will go thousand miles.
    ^ you should add in "a" before "thousand"

    No matter what the world say.
    ^ here it should be "says" but if you want it to rhyme, why don't you add in "will" before "say"

    nice job! 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by blueknight

    Ok goran this sis great and i admit that your good in short love poems , the only things that capture my attention is the fist stanza the line says
    "I can fly like a bird'
    um that was ok but then it would be better if you change that in such more captivating line

    thats all and the rest was great i love the flow

    hope it will help you

    thanks

    Geneross

  • 17 years ago

    by Just Lucy

    Awww its so sweet, i loved it!! your a great writer.. no doubts!!

    xoxo Lucy

  • 17 years ago

    by Bridgette

    Aww... this is such a sweet poem. She is a very lucky girl. The flow and rhythm of this is really good and I loved all of it! Keep it up! 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by jello

    Ah this poem is so cute! it has a pretty good flow and it's just over all very good.

  • 17 years ago

    by A Broken Bleeding Soul

    Now that's passion... you have a way with words. Great job 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Ashley

    Wow you write so beautifully

  • 17 years ago

    by Darien

    You are one of the best love poets on this site. This was a sweet, simple poem with a lot of heartfelt emotions. Wonderful writting.

  • 17 years ago

    by Brittney Follett

    I usually say, my fav stanza is... but... i like them all! great job 5/5 you deserve no less.

  • 17 years ago

    by lexie

    Its so sweet.i really like it:Dbeautifully written.
    --lexie

  • 17 years ago

    by *shae-natasha*

    Your a fabulous writer. You are insparational. I'm not as good as you but i hope to be one day. Thanks for your comment on one of m poems. I love getting comments cause i love when i know that someone is reading m poems and someone appreciates them. Your great, keep on writing...
    thanks again
    love from shae!

  • 17 years ago

    by myshiningstar14

    Your styles are different..vry refreshing. keep up the great work. vry good piece.

    Lissa

  • 17 years ago

    by ! CLAIREEE.

    This poem of yours, is beautiful! i love it. it made me smile....for a long time. lol. i look forward to reading more of your poems, your an excellent poet. and im in love with your writing. :D

    Love Claire. x o x o

  • 17 years ago

    by MadelineJayde

    W0w... that is amazing, y0u hav s0 much talent!! an0ther beautiful p0em by a beautiful auth0r ;x
    l0ve maddy x0ox

  • 17 years ago

    by bOlly danCer

    To see your beautiful smile,
    I will change my own way.
    I will break the chain of values,
    No matter what the world say.

    hey yaar
    thats simply beautiful 5/5

    :)

  • 17 years ago

    by The Lonely Rose

    Awwwwwwww......thts really sweet......a 5/5 for me keep it up!!