O' Wow, O'wow! It was beautiful, I loved this poem so very very much! The emotion the flow the structure it was all so good! I truley loved it,

Great job,
-AnnMarie

Woah.. this really is a great poem. the structure and flow of it was amazing. i definately know how this feels.. excellent job.
Tammie

Read separatly, each stanza is very good. Together, the second stanza throughs it off slightly. The lines are a bit longer and the rhythm therefore, changes. I am being very picky here but finding a way to shorten what you are saying in this stanza will definitely improve an already good poem.
Sarah

Ooh I like the ending! I agree with Sarah though, the stanzas are very good seperately, but the second one throws you off a bit... Try taking out one or two syllables from each line in that stanza, it should improve the flow to make it more like the rest of the poem. Well done though it is a good poem!
- Polly

Awh, I love it Hun. It was a really well written and sweet poem. Great Job.

Wow, jess! i love this poem. its sooo cute. really it is. your so good at rhyming.! your poems are absolutely beautiful and i hope one day i can be as good as a poet as you :) i miss you! hope your having a good summer. xxx

I just love the first two sentences Jess! You really drew me in if not any other reader...It really made me wish this poem was longer because when you start off with a great stanza it makes the reader never want to stop reading!! I just loved the last two sentences as well..so even though I wished it was longer...you ended it very well!! Great job...5/5 of course!
-Krissey

This is a great poem and you shouldn't change anything on it!

You know I loved this poem, it is awesome, really deep, and thoughts and emotions flowed throughout. keep writing, you have talent
xxxxxx

Aw very cute poem... It wa sweet, yet short, but said a lot. I don't know, I just liked it. Good job.

xDarkSuicidex 5.5

P.S. I did two, just because you were nice enough to rate something of mine. And just because I'm nice like that. ;)

Aww Jessy i loved this, the words flowed so well, you really know how to write! I love every single one of your poems, you are so talented baby!

--Steph

Wow, this piece is a good one. the flow never ceases or breaks apart. greatly written as well, great job.
Driver

Please god relieve me of this pain
[[You should have the "g" in God capitalised. tehe. =P]]

It was a pretty sad poem, Jessy. But I really liked that last stanza, it was beautiful the way you worded it. Defiantly a fantastic job. Keep it up! Ily! 5/5

Natalie``

Well. I have already left a comment for htis one but it was short. So I am going to leave a much better detailed one. :]

Veryvery great Stanza to start your poem off with. Put so much sadness and emotion within it. I thought it was brillant. I really loved it. Specially the flow and how it rhymed. Great Job.

I liked the second one aswell. The "My brain waiting for my heart to delete" gave great feeling. Sorta how I felt when I left my boyfriend of nearly 16 months cause he cheated on me. Nearly reminds me of just how I felt. So wonderful job on that one aswell.

Then the last stanza was absolutely amazing. Perfect start and a perfect ending. I loved all the emotion you caputred about pain. Seemed like it was me or my very close friend or a loved on that was telling me this, or me over hearing them telling God to. Again, lovely work Jessy.

Whoa..Okay sorry about this lengthy comment but I have done all your recents, least I am pretty sure and most have so many comments it's so hard to flip threw and look. Hope you are alright.

[Megan]

That was a pretty good poem! girl you got the talent in writting poems! i am speechless

5/5. I loved the ending! Alot of emotion and I loved how you written "caught in a net" Just loved it!

Kewl a 5/5 for me...its a good poem

Fantastic, feels like i wrote that myself about a situation im in at the moment! so thanks for that.

would you mind if i copied this and sent it to someone, as i think its really good? xx

Awesome write!!

absolutely heartfelt and emotional

great job!

sophie :)

This is exactly how i feel at least i kno im not alone