Awh, that was quite good.. The flow was off but it could be improved by shortening some of your lines.. Also, I would recommend that you do not rhyme your poems.. Maybe practice writing them without rhymes for a while and then do that when you are really good.. Nice job though.. Keep your chin up! 4/5

Hey i think that it was really good. this poem showed how much u cared about her! im really sry! but hey ur a good poet ! keep writing!