Gruesomely done...I like it. The imagery is gut wrenching, very nice.
Also the story within really kept me intrigued. Great flow as well. Over all quite outstanding. Love ya~Holly

Wonderfully written. This is a true masterpiece, and by far one of my favourties of yours.

great one. You are simply amazing!!

love and peace
shobhana

Wow 5/5...i luvd it...its like out of a old literature book, graphic but beautiful, u hav a really great talent w/ words!

That was brilliant, from start to finish i was gripped.
The language flowed beautifully
Brilliant poem!
5/5
*Gem*

That was SO well written.. I hadta get my dictionary out, but it was still awesome.. Great idea..

I really enjoyed this poem :) its fantastic :))

This work enhanced my vocabulary..
haha.. fantastic writing..

5/5

~pilar ann

I first read this on the discusion board and decided I had to rate this. It seems like you came from a different time in this poem. Your words simply carve out the archaic time period in which you wish to represent. Great poem.