Comments : Blessed Water

  • 11 years ago

    by Catastrophic Beauty

    Wow. Excellent poem. It was very powerful strong and I got lured into it very quickly. You are truly a great writer. Never Stop!

  • 11 years ago

    by Catastrophic Beauty

    ... I forgot to say that the rhyming was great and the flow was so smooth.

  • 11 years ago

    by Natalie

    Teasing eyelashes admiring the past, lost in future
    And hearing a soul wishing you'd arrive with a tear

    ^^I really liked those two lines, they stood out so much to me. They were both a great way to end the poem aswel, well, in my opinion they were.

    The flow was great in this, I liked it alot. Your wording was awesome! You described everything very well, like per usual! I don't think there's anything that should be changed. Keep it up, Kaylee. Glad to see you've posted another poem. =D Tehe. 5/5

    Natalie``

  • 11 years ago

    by Darien

    Hmm, interesting piece. When I first read the title, I thought you meant Holy Water, like what the priests use to bless people at baptism. Or what the sprinkle on people during special occasions. This was a really well written poem. I liked the imagery. I liked the ending of this as well.

  • 11 years ago

    by ~DaYiS~

    Wow!!! we do have great poets in this site!!!!

  • 11 years ago

    by Krissey

    Beautifully and deep written poem we have here Kaylee..I loved every word, every description....this poem really stood out to me! Excellent write it was a pleasure to read!
    -Krissey

  • 11 years ago

    by Love Panda

    So deep and meaningful.
    i like your double meaning, or was it triple meaning?? *hmmm* anyway, its a great poem, hope to read some more of yours.

    october xx

  • 11 years ago

    by N J Thornton

    Lovely descriptions and well written. I tend to find "heart" and "love" cliche words and I know sometimes they are difficult to avoid. However, using them twice in one stanza isn't good in my opinion. Could you use other words there to break this "overused" word issue up?
    Apart from that I enjoyed this. Thanks for sharing.

  • 11 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    I really liked this but you had no flow at all... And that really took away from such a vivid poem. Good job, though.

    xDarkSuicidex 5.5

  • 11 years ago

    by Samantha

    I don't agree with the comment that you had no flow. It flowed very well for me, like a picture being painted or a story being told. Probably the second of the two considering this is poetry, lol. The only question I have...what is a "cavas"? (third to last line) I'm either dumb or you misspelled "canvas" or something, though I'm probably just dumb, lol.

    I really enjoyed reading this poem, you have a good way of stating things without making them cliche.

  • 11 years ago

    by AntiSocial16

    This poem spoke so many different emotions and scenarios and i think thats why it makes it so beautiful and wonderfully written. please keep writing and stay safe stron and healthy

  • 11 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Another very good poem.
    Yes, this one didnt capture me as much as the others but it was still a worthwhile read.
    You have talent to bring life into your poemss, make them real, it is really good how you do that.
    keep writing
    xxxx

  • 11 years ago

    by Sondos

    That was really beautiful Kaylee

    I loved it

    Sondos

  • 10 years ago

    by Kenny

    WOAH! this is really great. . I love reading this, ^^, just like it very, though not much of a flow. . but overall. . . . fantastic