Wow, another great poem in this site, very well written,but so sad, i understand what you are going through.
very nice poem and a special one.
keep up your great job
5/5

While If this story is true I can see how that would be sad, and very sad it would be for someone to go through, I could not feel the sadness but instead it read like a story or a movie I might have seen. Your wording was good but you may want to focus on the emotions you're putting through. The rythmes were good though and if this was true then hope everything is better now.

Pretty good, the start was amazing, the flow was very good. But than you kinda lost it in some lines and the flow got choppy. Keep it up

This is one of the most heart-touching
poems that I have read this week .
You really painted the most toughest
picture that there is to paint . I don't
know if that is what really happend to
you .(Because you know we poets use
other techniques besides the truth to
tell a story ) . But if it did I must say
that you are a strong young women to
have been able to endure so much and
still walk proud and tall as you tell your
story . You are a great poet and I
salute you for your accomplishments .
I look forward to reading more of your
work . Because truthfully I would hate
to miss out on another one of the
worlds GREATEST POETS . Keep up the
good work hun, and your be at the top
in no time . See you in my favorites .

Hugs & Kisses
Letty

Oh how sad...
I can relate to this one...
It has so much emotions..
Don't lose hope..N keep yer head high

Awhh, that was so sadd.. The flow was a little off as many of the lines were not the same length.. Also, you had many spelling and grammer errors that you need to fix.. Although, your descrriptions and the emotion you put into it was great.. Nicely done 5/5

Hey i loved this poem...i could realte to this...living in southcentral...with no dad....and streets messed up...yup...lifes sad...

Holy Shit. This poem was very sad. But it was great I couldn't take my eyes off of it until the very last word. If this is true then -hugs- life can get real real hard. but strong people as I'm sure you are. make there way through it somehow. Always smile, tomorrow is a different day!!! =D this poem was amazing definitely 5/5

Thats a nice poem! loved the last 2 sentence! keep it up!

I do not like the broken rhyming scheme or format and how you kept one line long, one short... It was, however a seemily good venting peice.

xDarkSuicidex 4.5

I won't even begin to *critque* this, as I am just a novice myself! I will say that I admire your ability to submit your poems/thoughts/ideas, as I feel words have power and touch lives. I enjoyed reading this and if it is about your life, You hang in there! Adversities create strength and wisdom unimagined!!

Wonderful write! The venting and dep sorrow through it was absolutely amazing. It always kept me jumping to read more. Although the flow got choppy in some lines, it still ended up to be an incredible piece. Keep up your great work!

Awesome poem. rythme flowsvery well. it has alot of emotions. gr8 job:)

Pretty good, the emotion in this was definitely raw. The flow was pretty good except from some areas. Keep it up

I really really like how this poem started out, the flow was great and your choice of wording was good too. Once it got near towards in the middle, all that changed. You still had great emotion in that area but that's where I thought the flow died a little. At the end it kinda picked back up though. Great job!

Natalie``

Good poem, really sad. Your emotions were greatly expressed in this poem and the flow is pretty good. Great write--

Good poem, i give it a 5/5!!! keep it up!!!

Wow this poem is really touching I love the way you used your words and the flow the poem had, excellent write 5/5

A very sad and touching story. It had a nice poetic flow to it and was really enjoyable. Keep your chin up.

Wow, wonderful write. I loved it. The flow was good, however the structure needs work, perhaps breaking it into Stanzas would help. Other than that wonderful write.

Peace, Joe