Love this!!!!!!

Awww, that's sweet :)

Really cute.

xoxo

This poem is fantastic!
It makes me want to be back there!
..xx

I LOVE YOUR POEM! THIS IS THE BEST WAY TO GET YOUR FIRST KISS! YOU ROCK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

yes, that was my friend...i absolutely agree though...you are AMAZING!!!!! my friend thinks that this is whats going to happen with me and my...*friend*

LOVE YOU!!!!
~rix~

Great! 5/5 for me!

That is SO beautiful....I loved the picture drawn and the emotion was so deep. Really great write. Keep it up!
~Jules

I loved the way you ended this poem. It ended with an impact. Thank you, Robert.

Awe. its so adorible! i love it :D

I love your poems and that one had me going awwww, I know what that feels like!! You so tap into the emotions!

You write the best poetry!!!this is so awesome.

I like this one a lot. The idea of it is really good, and it give a lot of details. Is this poem about you though?

Wow. that was absolutely breath taking. I could fele every emotion and see the whole picture very clearly. That's probubly what I'll be like on my first kiss haha.
Anyways, great poem. A pleasure as always :)

God Bless,
Sarah-Joy

What a beautiful poem- you perfectly express all the wonderful feelings of being in love- you write with such a romantic flair... i really like the story; how you convey what each of them is thinking... great job. ps thank you for your kind comments xx

Well I must say I wanted to "tear" your poem apart but it was so good. LOL, JK, Thank you for the critique you gave me. I understand what you are saying, but unfortunatly that is how someone on this site told me to do a parrquette and I did not do any further research..................... so now it is just a poem.

Your poem was marvelous, there was only one line that threw me off and that "Just two separate hearts are beating" It's just where it is at that it seems out of place. Over all it truley was an excellent poem!

-AnnMarie

This spread such a warm sweet feeling in my heart =)
I love poems about first kisses, there's always something so special about it, a first kiss with someone is something to treasure and you really showed that in this piece..
Beautiful poem
5/5
*Gem*

Awwe so insanely cute! Such a great topic for a poem. Excellent write. Great job

Aww this poem is absolutely precious. I loved how everything flowed and the rhyme scheme was just exquisite! The ending was wonderful as well! Great job! 5/5

Comment #2:
I commented on this poem a long time ago, but when I reread it I just felt so much more emotion from it and I wanted to comment again. I can relate to it so much better and you did an exellent job with this piece. Wonderful talent.
~Midnight Sun

This made me cry because the first kiss is special. 5/5

This is so beautifull, so pure. wow

Narc xxx