Comments : Goodnight Dear World

  • 15 years ago

    by Mask of Pain

    Good job. I think it will be a awsome song with music.

  • 15 years ago

    by Teria

    "So don't think to slow"
    [So don't think too slow]
    - It's a mistake on the written version, not sung version. (:

    "Don't act to fast"
    [Don't act too fast]
    - I didn't see that before, but it's right after the one above. (:

    "The day has past"
    - With this line, I'm wondering how it sounds sung. I don't like it too well. And, I'm thinking I wouldn't like it too well sung either. I'm not sure and can no way truly judge that though. You very well could. What I was thinking, if it works better or if the other doesn't seem quite right is; the days gone by, the days have passed, so on. Just not that line? Lol ..

    I must say I really like this song. Not just because I found mistakes either, haha. I think it's emotional in a manly yet emotional way, lol. It's well written, well though out. As majority of yours seem to be. It shows proof of a talented writer. (:

  • 5 years ago

    by Adreamer

    I enjoyed reading this, thank you for sharing :)

    Though I am wondering what the tune would add to it.