Comments : In a pool of blood

  • 17 years ago

    by Kenneth

    Very good poem...very sad though.. but so are mine for the most part.... 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Gabriel

    Great poem its sadddd :(( lol good job

  • 17 years ago

    by Curry

    This is scary=[..lol but it is good!

  • 17 years ago

    by Devyn

    Really, Really Good.

  • 17 years ago

    by Christina McDowell

    I feel you michelle...

  • 17 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    This is really sad. I enjoyed reading though. I think it may have read better if you put it into stanzas, but overall it's very good.

  • 17 years ago

    by Mousie

    I thought this was a really good poem... maybe a little elementary in the wording, but it still deserved a 5, nice job

  • 17 years ago

    by Cindy

    Wow that is really deep. The pain and sadness can be felt throught this entire piece. Excellent writing. Take care Cindy

  • 17 years ago

    by .K.i.T.t.Y.

    Wow. i was immeadiately drawn in. and the DS, easier for me to read. lovely poem. keep the work up!

  • 17 years ago

    by BECCA lessTHANthree

    Wow.. very gorry but still a great write.. nice job! strong emotion

  • 17 years ago

    by Landi Cordier

    This is real good! wow, oh, and thanx for the comment on my poems!

    Narc xxx

  • 17 years ago

    by steve

    This poem isnt my favorite uve done, its a little choppy with the rhythem and rhyming. .its still got alot of emotion though

  • 17 years ago

    by Brook

    This is really sad =[
    But so good. i love the flow of it..and how you can feel your pain as you read it.
    5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    Wow...
    This was excellent!
    I really enjoyed this.
    The imagery used was astounding.
    Excellently written.

  • 17 years ago

    by RJ

    Youre very talented... I love your poems...

  • 17 years ago

    by Darien

    Wow, this was a really sad poem, especially the ending. A very nice though, keep up the good work!

  • Great structure, short simple sentences that impact and are full of emotion, loved it! 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by David

    The set out if different. very different. but i would say i good different. i found it easier to read.

    5/5. the words you used are perfect for this text. this kind of writing.

    David

  • 17 years ago

    by BECCA lessTHANthree

    Wow.. i really like this poem.. but this line"straight through the heart as i think of bad memories i've had." i think is a little too long for the flow of the poem

  • 17 years ago

    by Tainted Beauty

    Aww, this is so sad, I'm sorry:( I liked this but once again, you should capatlize your letters. I also noticed a mistake:

    "your lies and distrust has driven me insane"

    It should be "have" instead of "has"

    --Steph