So many times we hear the words
and leave the rest behind
Uncaring of the hurt that's trapped
within the tortured mind.
If we could stop and hold the heart
as it opens wide
And give a comfort to the soul
that hides behind the smile,

I really enjoyed this whole piece, but especially the last verse. Very well written, perfect rhyme and good flow.

I enjoyed this outlook on what's behind a smile. I've heard too many poems (prob me included) where it just sounds corny or overused, but you took it and expounded upon it. It was beautiful. And like always, Your comments mean so much to me. I enjoy them because I enjoy your poetry so it means a lot. Thanks!
Charisma*

So many times we hear the words
and leave the rest behind
Uncaring of the hurt that's trapped
within the tortured mind.
If we could stop and hold the heart
as it opens wide
And give a comfort to the soul
that hides behind the smile,
^^^^
Jeannie I can't even begin to express how very touching this part is.

You sure did grab my heart and give it a shake.

Wonderfully penned Auntie Jeannie ....lol
You'll get this part when you read it in the threads

Take care
Much love Luanne

Aww. So Sad! i really enjoyed reading this. it flowed very nicely and was basicly just a great poem!
a few points-
by a heart that broke in two
i think this line needs a looking-at. it jsut doesn't seem 'right' to me. idk. im crazy.

memory and relieved, in the way you have them don't rhyme as well as they could. try changing the lengths of the lines to they stop at the same beat. or whatever.
also i think this line should be longer. it seems way to short for me.
'as it opens wide'

but overall i really loved this poem. great job. =]

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This is such a excellent poem. Everything about it is just wonderful. The rhyme the flow. It is a wonderful write. Great Job!

Sad and emotional, yet so well penned and meaningful. thisi poem is excellent, keep it up!!

This is really creative good job!! keep it up!

3 words. Beautiful. I, myself, can relate to this poem. Poems you can relate to are the best. If you have been able to capture your feelings and let another no that they aren't alone, you have done a beautiful thing.
Much love ♥