Hey hun this was really powerful. lot of emotion coming trhough.. xx

Welcome to P&Q Gabriella !

I see you are a new member and wanted to say hello. Looking forward to reading more of your poetry.

Very nice poem... how long have you wrote for? well anyways you are a really good writer for your age lol later Mandz

Wow awesome poem
my favorite stanza is
"that you can't see the shadows
living in my eyes
that you can't see the evidence
the ashes, as my soul dies"

Couldn't you listen?
just once in your life!
so i could put down this burden
and pick up my knife i like this part ive been through all of this i know what its like

Your writting is beautiful. It's full, strong, packed full of emotion. BEAUTIFUL!

the only error I found was this:
the pain of your love
tearing me apart making me bleed

it should be
tearing me apart,
making me bleed

Couldn't you listen?
just once in your life!
so i could put down this burden
and pick up my knife,
i have been ther and i am still in recovery but writing helps people understand you and thats great, great poem keep at it

Beautiful poem. Keep up the great work. The pain seems as if it's about to implode. Great job and hope you keep at it.

Fantastic!!!

Your words are so powerful, and I LOVE the way you think of things that I wouldnt associate the kiss of the kinife etc.

You rock

Honeypot x

Oh hunny! your writing is inspirational, all your poems are so sad though :( i love all of your poetry! great work again!

xoxo Lucy