I hope that didn't happen to you my dear,
I hate when people's only life has to be screwed. x_x;

Anyways, nice poem. Rated a five. ^^; Comment and rate back?

♥

Goodjob notsoinnocent! i love it!!

Wow this was a good poem. I really liked it!!!

This piece is full of emotion, with great sentence structure and flow. Great job

Omg... i can fully relate to this poem. it was really really well writen. i hope things got better.

much love and many kisses,
bex

This is amazing, so beautiful

distant screams and a gunshot
there was no place left to hide

i loVd it!
luv gabriella

Good poem. I like it
~red

Definitely 5/5!! i loved all the ideas used in that poem, and it had great feeling in it especially the last verse! absolutely terrific poem :)

keep up the gud work
take care,
bridget

p.s it wud be great if you could comment and rate back!..??

This is beautiful. I really enjoyed it, and I wouldn't know what to fix with it. The parallel structure had a good effect upon the poem.

<3 5/5.

Full of the deepest kind of pain. Tugs at your heatstrings. Good job!