I LOVE this poem.. at parts is seems like it kind of dragged on but for the most part it was a great write.. the flow was almost perfect and it was an ejoyable read.. i think the ending was fine.. a little cliche but the whole poem wasnt so it works just fine

Wow, that was amazing. all the emotion put into it made it even better.

100% 5/5.

Umm,Hun-The poem might have been kinda long,but it was worth reading-REALLY,REALLY GOOD ;) 5/5 -Ria

This was a sweet poem. Pretty sad and the emotion was there, which I liked. What I don't like, however, is that you use practically no punctuation. Your readers won't know when to stop if you don't use punctuation. You also didn't capitalise where you should have, and you should use apostrophes when needed (e.g. when writing she's instead of "shes".)

Overall it was a sweet write. I enjoyed it.

Aw. Thats so sad.
It made me get tingles reading the last bit, Thats so heartbreaking.

EXCELLENT POEM! I felt every little bit of it.
3rd stanza, 1st line, before is spelt wrong.

Well deserved 5/5.
Great work.
Bec.x

You know this poem brought tears to my eys!!! it was truly amazing!!! IT WASNT TOO LONG!!! It was like a short story from one of those books with many stories in it. please dont EVER stop...you are amazing, you make it sound so simple =]!! it sounds like a poem i wrote a while back hmm we have the same ideas ahaha...but AWESOME JOB!!!!

added to my fave list too =D

CourtneyxHolland
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