Comments : Like Soldiers

  • 10 years ago

    by Karl Wild GG23

    This poem is amazing, I love the way the stanzas flow so well together. I think it's important for friends to always know they have eachothers backs. Keep writing at 4 am because this poem is awesome. 5/5 great job hun xo

  • 10 years ago

    by Olorin

    It could rhyme a little better in some parts but then the stanza:

    'And when you cry, never be afraid
    I will listen as you speak your mind
    You and me, on this painful crusade
    When you break, I will fall behind'

    Was amazing and it blew me away. Very well written indeed, keep them coming!

  • 10 years ago

    by XsuicideXsexXscandalX

    Good job

  • 10 years ago

    by silvershoes

    ^ I'm sorry, what kind of comment is that? Good job? What exactly did I do a good job with? There was no work involved, this was pleasurrrrreee. Anyway, sorry, I dislike meaningless comments on praise.

  • 10 years ago

    by silvershoes

    Of*

  • 10 years ago

    by silvershoes

    ^Thanks for writing a comment on my poem that has absolutely nothing to do wtih the content AND rating me down. That's lovely :)

  • 10 years ago

    by silvershoes

    *with

    Ahh, I hate spelling errors.

  • 10 years ago

    by silvershoes

    Good. Wrong for me to assume, so I'm sorry. Still, I dislike BOTH of your comments...try writing something about my poem, even if it's mean. I accept criticism.

  • 10 years ago

    by Wallace

    Very nice, i really enjoyed this, loved the start, loved the ending good job.

  • 10 years ago

    by ADifferentSoul

    Loved the start, loved the end loved the whole thing... really great... and a very good choice of words... keep it up

  • 10 years ago

    by Ashley Eyerman

    I love this poem it great and sad but i love it

  • 10 years ago

    by Rose not your average

    I loved this poem it was great!

  • 10 years ago

    by Karl Wild GG23

    Haha I love how they let me re vote your poems lol 5/5 for the second or 3rd time. GG23

  • 10 years ago

    by Robert

    This is a very endearing poem I liked it. Your flow was well done your images vivid and your message powerful well done Plot121

  • 6 years ago

    by Rania Moallem

    Rest your weary eyes on my shoulder
    Wrap my arm around your heaving chest
    We can reflect upon our hurt when older
    You will always be a welcome guest
    ^^wow...amazing amazing amazing Jane.. I love the love and the faithfulness that you opened up for a long lasting friendship/from the very 1st stanza!

    Long days, and even longer nights
    Look me in the eyes and please believe
    I will help set these things to rights
    You know that I could never leave
    ^^^^^JANE..the poem is flowing so well..i just love the way it's rhyming ..I love the care in ur words.
    and the simplicity.

    Like soldiers, I have seen what you saw
    Someone in this world feels the same
    Know a smile will love each lasting flaw
    It takes time, but listen for your name
    ^^:) loved this stanza a lot a lot ..i love the comparison .. and the wording.. and when i finished the stanza which is after this one..I had no idea why this was down voted !!

    We wait in line for the calling hour
    Hold my hand, I will stand beside you
    Lift your chin; you need not cower
    I know what you have been through
    ^^well yes, this stanza gave goosebumps ..I was able for once..to be touched by a friendship poem..which spoke deep emotions. A stanza that poetically spoke how u DO know this friend of yours VERY well..

    If we can make it past this awful night
    Then we can make it through anything
    ^^^very positive ..spirit lifting

    When you stumble, it will be all right
    I can carry you until the end, little wing
    ^^this was very tender ..and i couldnt help but smile. and wish that my friends think of me and for me..the way you did for lizz.

    Great poem.
    5/5
    hope thiss poem gives u some gd memories, not sad.

    *stay ur self

  • 1 year ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    Check out the visits on this poem . It seems anything inspired by Lizzy-loo turns to Gold
    I love the way your poem is written ,but I suppose I don't know the full story behind it these days following veterans day .
    Of all the poems I have read I may never forget "What if we tried"Elisabetta

    by Michael D Nalley
    You shared a faithful smile with us, as each new day dawned.
    Every step of the way, by the way, and somehow beyond.
    The rhythm of your heart knows no end, only seasons.
    Though we may be apart, must we dwell upon reasons?

    If we asked, "what if we tried" while we take it all in stride.
    We're humbled, I must confide, by what we find inside.
    With each shining star we know the darkness will pass.
    Though we may try to capture time, like sand in a glass.

    A tiny falling grain of sand to eternity is not so great.
    Yet, by the time we say good-bye, it always seems too late.
    The harmony of "heavenly bodies" sing a constant song.
    You're forever in our thoughts, so we may only say so long.

    • 1 month ago

      by silvershoes

      Michael, I don't know why, but I never saw your comment here until right now. It warms my heart, to say the least, knowing someone else thinks of our Lizzy from time to time. I know she touched your heart like she touched mine. I hope you are well, dear friend.