Needs work

Ok thank you!!!

I thinks its pretty good

Thatnks!

Interesting. Ok here is my advice, your poems are great, alot of emotion alot of truth and so beautiful. Go check out some of the favourite authors and see how they write, see they're style and the way they format they're work.
Also focus on writting do not, instead of don't. I will instead of i'll and so on.
You have alot of talent keep it up just pay attention to grammar and word usage and your poetry will begin to flow better. :)