I liked this poem, It was powerful and held strong emotion throughout it. Nice vocab you used here helped the flow alot. Well done on a nicely written sad poem.

~mel

Awhh this was sad:[ but it was wonderfully written. you did a great job on it! it flowed really well. 5/5

Ah the ending was the best. no taking your life is not the right way. well this poem was great. the words wrote really spoke to my soul. well done.

5/5 David

Awesome, so strong and well written. You really grabbed me with this poem well done. 5/5. Alot of emotion expressed it really pulled me in. well done!! : )

Well done.
It wasn't one of my favorites of yours,
but I think you still did a good job!
I really enjoyed the little girl theme.
It's good to kind of talk as if you were someone else.
Or a narrorater.
Great job!

"to be stand alone.. it doenst mean ur all alone",,, this is only the way that u have to move on and be strong.. well very powerful dedication coz its totally express ur truly words.

Great poem, full of emotions. It also has a great flow. Loved it:) 5/5

I have to stay that the first stanza was absolutely excellent, but it started to go slightly downhill from there. It lost some of its basic imagery. Even still, it was a fairly good poem. Not as good as the others, but still above average.

Very good visuals in this poem..

i liked these lines a lot
"The world is against her, crushing her dreams"

"Inside she cries for innocence lost" i like how it sounds.. rather than lost innocence

"suspended in time"

however this line "Living in her own private hell" needs one more syllable to flow.. but besides that the flow was perfect.. also i dont understand the strucutre it goes from a 3 lined stanza to 4 then 5 and then 5 again rather than 6

Hm. Still cliche here, but I can understand you write for you feelings and not for me.
However, as in the other poems, I really didn't feel anything from you, yet I did. It's hard to explain. I'm not sure why, but I don't much like it. Sorry. And, again, punctuation. I'll say that everytime.=/

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 4.5