Thats kinda how i feel about my dad...he always lived close by but was never around. i liked this poem but i felt that it ended at an odd part...either way its good though :) because it shows your true feelings
U made a error right where u wrote daddy hopes u die. read that sentence again and youll see what im sayin. its visit and not vist u missed an I towards the end of the poem ma. poems suppose to make a statement if u read my stuff it always end strong. the ending of ya poem is suppose to make people think and say wow. Try something like "I wonder why u wasnt there" or " Now because of you these tears are non- refundable" something like that to leave the reader thinking about u. this poem is fare ill give it a three.