Comments : Missing

  • 10 years ago

    by Miranda

    Great poem.Alot of emotion.
    I'm not an expert but I think it might sound a little more complete if it were longer.But it is still a 5/5 as it is.Excellent job,
    Miranda

  • 10 years ago

    by Kalee nichole

    Thats kinda how i feel about my dad...he always lived close by but was never around. i liked this poem but i felt that it ended at an odd part...either way its good though :) because it shows your true feelings

  • 10 years ago

    by handsome

    Hmm, what does my fried talk about here, whatever it is sounds so very personal, its still a nice piece of writing, hey if u read this just say hi in return ok...handsome here

  • 9 years ago

    by Larry Chamberlin

    Don't give up; don't accept other people's judgments about your mom.
    Someday you may have the chance to judge on your own.
    Whether or not you feel better, well, that's not really the point.

  • 9 years ago

    by Josh

    I like the way you convey the emotions, it's almost liek I can hear you talking

  • 9 years ago

    by David Wallace

    U made a error right where u wrote daddy hopes u die. read that sentence again and youll see what im sayin. its visit and not vist u missed an I towards the end of the poem ma. poems suppose to make a statement if u read my stuff it always end strong. the ending of ya poem is suppose to make people think and say wow. Try something like "I wonder why u wasnt there" or " Now because of you these tears are non- refundable" something like that to leave the reader thinking about u. this poem is fare ill give it a three.

  • 9 years ago

    by David Wallace

    Thats better but still make the corrections. you mispelled visit and i dont think thats what u meant to say that on line 8. if u did meant to say that i apologize. thanks 4 the mention.

  • 9 years ago

    by Aaron Martin

    Idk what to say.... thats brilliant

  • 9 years ago

    by Nate the philosopher

    Wow I loved it
    Very emotional and very sad
    5/5