Jeannie
This is an amazing poem. Imagery and word choices are excellent. The pain, lonliness, heartache cry from you words. This piece really touched my heart.

So now the house stays empty
for no mortal can be found
To break the wall of all the pain
built strong with silent sounds
Too tight to find a passage
to the heart that beats inside
The house without a window
has now vanished in the night.

The ending was great.
~CLAP~~CLAP~~CLAP~
Take care love Cindy

Jeannie,
This was such a hauntingly beautiful write. So much emotion was put into this. This is by far my favorite of yours. The imagery and flow were awesome. These lines especially touched me......

Among the tatters of mere words
are wounds that cannot heal
Lost upon the dusty floors
of broken hearts they yield
To cower from the pain of loss
the thoughts too hard to hold
That rips away the shattered dreams
that died within the soul.

Awesome Job,
Kay

A really beautifully worded poem, every line is penned with thought, my favourite by far was

Among the tatters of mere words
are wounds that cannot heal

they just sang out to me, amazing. i loved the imagery and the feelings this poem leaves you with.

A very well done piece, and a neat structure for you to use. There was one part that seemed to not flow right though,

"That cuts the pieces of the cloth
that tears inside of me."

If you read that with it's stanza...it seems too wordy I think. Plus, you use the word "that" a lot as well. But i know I do the same. Just some suggestions!
Charisma*