Comments : Step into the emptiness

  • 10 years ago

    by Nix

    Beautiful piece. Such image and wording are incredible. You are my second favorite writer on the site. I love your work so much and this poem is extraordinary good.

  • 10 years ago

    by Mo

    Oh my gosh - I absolutely LOVED this one. Definitely fantastic writing!! I loved the colours and the feelings of rainbows and thinsg beautiful. It was a very nice feeling to read it. Well done!!!

    Mo

  • 10 years ago

    by Boy

    Realy good job

    the very first stanza
    Let me drink life
    from the palms of your hands
    Borrow me your wings
    made of dreams
    just for a while,
    to feel alive...

    this shows the beauty of your poem. such a great work in this stanza.

    but i think i loved these lines alot

    Just let me slide
    on the rainbows in your eyes,

    . you have showed great feelings of love, it shows that you know what is the love meaning. i am happy to read your this poem.
    you should keep it up this work.
    and one last thing that tha words you have used in your poems were excelllent matched with you feelings. very aggressive.

    and you know your these words force me to give you 5/5
    take care friend

  • 10 years ago

    by Sweet lig

    I admire ur imagination..it really has a great combination of emotion and action as well... i love to read again and again.. very stunning just keep on writing... 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by On Cupids Bad Side

    Beautiful piece once again. Great flow and good vocab. 5/5 from me =)

  • 10 years ago

    by BrokenREALiTy

    And to drown in that colors
    `it's either :
    "and to drown in those colors"
    or "and to drown in that color"

    Just let me slide
    on the rainbows in your eyes,
    `My favourite lines ! That shows an adorable elegance / beauty .

    You have a vast imagination . It's beautiful when put together with your choice of words, and emotion . Just a pretty piece .
    ..__MiNDYY

  • 10 years ago

    by Stephanie Naylor

    All i can say is WOW, that is such a great heartfelt poem. There was so much detail it had such imagination and your word choice was flawless, this is a very great peice of work, keep it up, 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Debbie

    Borrow me your wings
    `I think 'borrow' should be 'Lend'?

    This was truly a fantastic love poem. The mental images you conjured within your words brought into play a rather surreal and magical world. It's beautifully full of hope and love. And, like I've said, it's fantastic. Nicely done, nonetheless. 5/5 ~Marian

  • 10 years ago

    by K3LSI3

    Another excellent poem.I liked it alot.

  • 10 years ago

    by Sweet Fragility

    Imagery, great. Again, wonderful word choice. Lots of effort into this piece. Keep it up. 5/5

    Don't hold back
    in front of the abyss
    let's step into the emptiness
    and learn how to fly.

    My fave lines ^^

  • 10 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    Like I said, I envy your poetic skill This poem has an amazing free verse flow with a depth that is just out of this world

  • 10 years ago

    by Grey Ajurahck

    This is so wonderfully written. The wording, phrasing really paint a picture. This poem says so much. You are very talented.

    Peace,

    Grey Ajurahck

  • 10 years ago

    by Solus

    So pretty....but love is not always enough.

  • 10 years ago

    by Solus

    So pretty....but love is not always enough.

  • 10 years ago

    by Hebe

    Great poem.
    Love the words you used.

    " Just let me slide
    on the rainbows in your eyes "

    My favourite lines.
    Wonderful piece of writing.
    Take care

  • 10 years ago

    by Lost & Delirious

    Wow, I really liked your poem. You have a special way of writing, it's not a common one. I think this poem is really different from all the ones I've read before, and I really liked that. It's not boring at all.

    My favorite part is:

    Don't hold back
    in front of the abyss
    let's step into the emptiness
    and learn how to fly.

    I think repeating that stanza was perfect. The first stanza is also a favorite. I just didn't know which one to choose. LOL.

    This love poem is great, I loved the originality in it.

    Great job!

    Keep writing.

    XoXo
    Gaby

  • 10 years ago

    by JaMeS

    Excellent writing it was a beautiful poem well done :) top marks!!

  • 10 years ago

    by kristen

    I LOVE this poem....its so beautifully written and deep. 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Melpomene

    I honestly don't know how you write poems that have a flow but don't rhyme I have only seen very few who can do this really well and it amazes me. Again the emotion so deep. I truely have loved every piece of yours I have read here. Well done you deserve a 5/5~mel

  • 10 years ago

    by fvalconbridge

    Another 5/5, i loved the opening paragraph. wikid :)

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