Very well written.... has a nice flow to it.... Its wording is very nice... great job

Very good. very depressing but good.
i would put my fall instead of eternal fall
that way it will balance a little better
5/5

Lovely,
oh, and breath is actually breathe in the fourth paragraph.

-shattered

Very good and sad...i love sad poems...very well written....flows very well too! Keep it up! 5/5