OMG this poem pulled @ my heartstrings, I felt every little step taken in the poem, it was great, but hoped it wouldnt end like that, as in giving up soo easily... ;) good job.

LUv Fay.

Wow. That was deep. I loved every bit of it. The emotion was so strong, and your flow was perfect. Your wording and vocabulary were amazing. I loved every bit!
Great job!
5/5
((Amber))

This is so heartbreaking to read and at the same time so beautifully written...the imagery you portray in this piece creates vivid pictures and you did a great job at painting pain's portfolio...beautiful work.

I hate poems like this, but i loved this one. I cant quite put my picture on it but it was an aesome poem, it was different to tothers and the imagery and wording was great.
love Tara-Kay
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I really have no idea what to say 3 flawless poems all on the same subject I want to say something that I haven’t said in my other two comments but it's the same thing again the imagery creates a huge amount of affect and the flow is smooth these are some of the best poems I have read.

Wow you surely don't like this kind of topic, do you?.. but the description were so different from one another. you brought up the emotion smoothly and really can capture a readers heart with this kind of gloomy poem.. but honestly, it didn't completely touched my heart (don't know why).. but still a5/5 for me for the creativeness and the flawless flow.

Very deep and heart- breaking. I like the way that you expressed emotions, excellently. Whole piece is flawless. I like its flow a lot. My favorite stanza is:
-Beaten once again, half starved to death
She is alone, she has nothing left
No will to live, no desire to die
She won't break down, and let them see her cry-
5/5 from me

It was really deep and very sad..The flow was really good through out the whole thing and the wording was just right

5/5